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Friday 17 March 2017

The Magic Box

The magic box

Today in Room 7 Miss Ashley picked up a mystery box. It looked funny but it was a mystery. Miss Ashley told us in steps what to do. We played this game to write about an a describing recount.

Firstly it began. First it was Syraiah - Lee. She was blindfolded with a tea towel, while she was blindfolded Miss Ashley had bought something special for her. It was mustard. It was really smelly. It was so smelly i had to block my nose.

Then as I was watching others have their turn I watched they looked so nervous. I felt terrible, but also watching others was really fun. I was hoping mine would be easy.

Later on it was my turn. I was so scared I did not want a turn but I wanted to try so I stood up walked to the table and got blindfolded, then Miss Appeared with that mystery in her hand. She grabbed my and dipped it into the mystery, my very first guess was sand and i got it right. I also described it with all these words such as soft, squishy, and it falls out my hand, also it moulds on my hand. All these words described the mystery.

I really enjoyed playing mystery box. I hope we could play again.

Story by - Hevani


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  • As I stood waiting, my heart was
  • I put my hand nervously into the box, and I felt
  • When Miss Ashley put the blindfold on, it felt like
  • The class giggled as

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The magic box


Today in Room 7 Miss Ashley picked up a mystery box. It looked funny but it was a mystery. Miss Ashley told us in steps what to do. We played this game to write about an a describing recount.

It finally began. Syraiah - Lee was the first. She was blindfolded with a tea towel, while she was blindfolded Miss Ashley had bought something special for her. It was mustard. It was really smelly. It was so smelly I had to block my nose. I was hoping mine would be easy knowing that Miss Ashley had put weird stuff in the box.

As I stood waiting my heart was thumping so hard that you could dance to the beat. I watched others have their turn, they looked so nervous. I felt terrible, but also watching others was really fun.

Later on it was my turn. It felt strange when I got blindfolded because everyone was so silent. I was so scared. I did not want a turn but I wanted to try, I walked to the table and got blindfolded. When Miss Ashley put the blindfold on it felt scary because I couldn't see anything or anyone. Then Miss appeared with that mystery in her hand. I dipped my hand nervously into the box and it felt so thin and rough just like the carpet. The class giggled as I yelled, "IT'S SAND". "She's Right".I got it right. I also described it with all these words such as soft, squishy, and it falls out my hand, also it moulds on my hand. All these words described the mystery.

I really enjoyed playing mystery box. I hope we could play again.

Story by - Hevani
Editing by - Hevani & Lydia



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